Wednesday, October 6, 2010

Lust & Jealousy


A sheen in her eyes
Missy eyes portrayed jealousy
Men's eyes hinted lust


My second try at HAIKU. Well, this one though is not related to nature, does not have a season word but I have used the 5-7-5 form of HAIKU.
I have written this HAIKU using the three words (hint, lust and sheen) which are this week's words provided by Three Word Wednesday.

15 comments:

Deborah said...

Very good!

♥ Chocolate lover ♥ said...

lovely! :)

Christine said...

I enjoyed this very much! I also wrote a haiku, and often write them without reference to the season. :-) Rules are made to be broken.

Angel said...

It's a nice poem but I do believe the second line has 8 syllables instead of seven.

Sumit Sarkar said...

Thank you Deborah, Chocolate Lover, Christine and Angel for liking this HAIKU.

Thank you Angel for correcting me. I forgot to count the two syllables in "missy". Well, I can use the word "envy" instead of "jealousy" to reduce the length of the second line to 7 syllables but I feel "jealousy" suits more here. So, I think I will be sticking with that for now. Thank you again Angel... :)

Tumblewords: said...

Probably more than a little truth, there! :) Nice work.

ThomG said...

you do well with the prompt and the haiku form.

Janet Lingel Aldrich said...

I like your haiku and how you pair it with the picture. Nice work!

Ramesh Sood said...

Very well thought out first attempt.. initially we all make mistakes and then learn and then we keep evolving.. finally doing well and in time gain expertise.. you have arrived..Well done..

gautami tripathy said...

Good haiku!

a subtle hint

Sumit Sarkar said...

Thank you Tumblewords, ThomG and Janet.

Thank you Ramesh and Gautami.

Nanka said...

You have used the prompt words well to create this Haiku!!

Sumit Sarkar said...

Thank you so much Nanka... :)

ms pie said...

a beautiful form of expression that truly captures the moment... i wonder who is going to sleep alone tonight...

Sumit Sarkar said...

Thank you ms pie.... :)

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