I saw her for the first time
In the old red-rose garden
My heart like a bell, chimed
Was she, an angel from heaven?
Was I in a fairyland
Or was it a dream? I wondered
To check, I pinched my hand
It was real, my senses answered
Her heart, I longed to win
And wanted her in my arms
I took a step, my legs felt thin
As I compared myself to her charm
The wait seemed an eternity
My vibes for her grew
I would die for this beauty
But what to do now, I had no clue
I would talk to her, I resolved
Guiding my feeble legs towards her
Nearing her, my utopia dissolved
And I wished to be a little braver
What a graceful smile on her face
Everything seemed still and
My heartbeat took up the pace
When she asked "Would you be my friend?"
For One Single Impression.
Prompt 139: Grace.
For Poetry Potluck at Jingle Poetry.
Theme: Love and Romance.
32 comments:
Ripe with grace and beauty... wonderful poetic sentiment!
Really great poem. Thanks for sharing.
"I took a step, my legs felt thin
As I compared myself to her charm".. If you had not written it down for us, I would not have known that a man can feel that way for a girl that he is charmed by.. :) Lovely poem, hope the story ends beautifully too.. !
Good piece!!
Rachana.
this is so very sweet.
beautiful rosy love.
Oh, the longing! Beautiful poem.
Lovely, poetic, and beautiful poetry. I love the smile of grace. Lovely take on the prompt.
What a lovely metaphor...full of imagery. Thanks for linking with Potluck xx
wow...your thoughts didn't fail you...
i like your bravery!
Thank you Wendilea, Kimberly, Rachana, Jingle, SandyCarlson, The Write Girl, buttercup and Amity for liking this poem...
Sumit, That was nice. Sweet and nice. Thank u for visiting my blog. :)
Well said and nice
Thank you Punam and Michael....
Very lucky Guy by having an offer of friendship at first sight.
It is difficult in real world from girls, specially coming from heavens.
Nice poem, dream and hope to youngsters and beginers.
Enjoy your new found love.
Happy rally
Thank you Sir for visiting my blog...
Yes, it is indeed very difficult for a guy to get a friendship offer at first sight...
Wonderful emotion in this; especially liked the references to thin and feeble legs. We have all experienced this feeling, and you so expertly captured it!
beautiful and very emotional, very lovely :)
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awesome :)
beautiful write :)
What a romantic look at grace!
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Thank you Christine, Through the lens, Chocolate lover, Short Poems, Geraldine for your generous words... :)
I loved it! And that she made the first move :)
this was a piece of heaven sumit. Beautiful, tender and soft.
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Thank you Rene... :)
Thank you Trisha... :)
Very poetic and nice flow to read. Good One Sumit.
Thank you Swapnap...
your words hold a strong feeling of desire and anticipation. lovely.
Thanks Tammie... :)
amazing the emotions of the heart... reflected well with passion and insight.... and not a word spoken, i'm sure... born again
ONE SINGLE IMPRESSION,BEING YOURSELF PAYS
Thank you ms pie...
Thanks Michael...
:)
such a tender take on the prompt. beautifully told.
Thanks a lot gabrielle... :)
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