A smoke ring
In between the pole star
It looks like her
No, its definitely her, my love
The old monk sips in
I feel happy
Ecstatic to be exact
I think I can touch her
Feel her presence
The smoke ring vanishes
She's still there
Surrounded by her competitors
Jealous they are of her beauty
I feel proud
Admiring her I take another sip
The smoke appears again
This time it blurs my vision
I can still see her
Dazzled by her brightness
I take in the holy water again
For One Shot Wednesday - Week 22 at One Stop Poetry.
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21 comments:
vision of beauty in the smoke...so beautiful. Brilliant work.
cheers
Cheers David... :)
Thanks a lot...
Lovely poem! I really like the imagery! Your flow of words is brilliant!
lovely imagery, nice flow...like the combination of smoke rings and holy water.
It is well done - such strong imagery
don't let the image fade
Thanks for sharing with One Stop
Moonie smiles
Beautiful images - touches upon a sense of the divine. Great work!
wow...what a beautiful pursuit...keep chasing..smiles
A beautiful write and imagery.
Anita.
What a beautiful imagination!!!!
Seeing beauty in smoke....
wonderful description of being high on beauty ;)
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Brilliant write, especially when you mention pole star and then express a case of mistaken identity.
dazzled by her brightness...beautiful write sumit - enjoyed this
it looks like her, definitely :)
Phhheeewww...sublime and so vivid!!
This was fantastic, Sumit! Racy, well paced and super mystic!
Love love love it!
Beautiful poem...quite a vision. I can certainly get a high from your words.
awww :)
so sweet :)
i love the smoke too..but as everyone else says the imagery is fantastic...thanks for sharing with one shot...pete
A beautiful imagery.. liked the way you presented it again.. thanks for sharing..
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Thank you everyone :)
Strong use of visuals. Good work.
Thank you Steve... :)
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