Tuesday, November 30, 2010

Feeling high

A smoke ring
In between the pole star
It looks like her
No, its definitely her, my love
The old monk sips in
I feel happy
Ecstatic to be exact
I think I can touch her
Feel her presence
The smoke ring vanishes
She's still there
Surrounded by her competitors
Jealous they are of her beauty
I feel proud
Admiring her I take another sip
The smoke appears again
This time it blurs my vision
I can still see her
Dazzled by her brightness
I take in the holy water again


For One Shot Wednesday - Week 22 at One Stop Poetry.

21 comments:

David Waters said...

vision of beauty in the smoke...so beautiful. Brilliant work.

cheers

Sumit Sarkar said...

Cheers David... :)
Thanks a lot...

deadpoet88 said...

Lovely poem! I really like the imagery! Your flow of words is brilliant!

SuziCate said...

lovely imagery, nice flow...like the combination of smoke rings and holy water.

moondustwriter said...

It is well done - such strong imagery

don't let the image fade

Thanks for sharing with One Stop


Moonie smiles

Chris G. said...

Beautiful images - touches upon a sense of the divine. Great work!

Brian Miller said...

wow...what a beautiful pursuit...keep chasing..smiles

Aquarius63 said...

A beautiful write and imagery.

Anita.

Rashmi said...

What a beautiful imagination!!!!
Seeing beauty in smoke....

ladynimue said...

wonderful description of being high on beauty ;)

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dustus said...

Brilliant write, especially when you mention pole star and then express a case of mistaken identity.

Claudia said...

dazzled by her brightness...beautiful write sumit - enjoyed this

Robin Ellen Lucas said...

it looks like her, definitely :)

Kavita said...

Phhheeewww...sublime and so vivid!!
This was fantastic, Sumit! Racy, well paced and super mystic!
Love love love it!

The Write Girl said...

Beautiful poem...quite a vision. I can certainly get a high from your words.

Harshika said...

awww :)

so sweet :)

Pete Marshall said...

i love the smoke too..but as everyone else says the imagery is fantastic...thanks for sharing with one shot...pete

Shashi said...

A beautiful imagery.. liked the way you presented it again.. thanks for sharing..

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Sumit Sarkar said...

Thank you everyone :)

Steve Isaak said...

Strong use of visuals. Good work.

Sumit Sarkar said...

Thank you Steve... :)

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